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She lies on the boughs of a great old tree;
Singing low from somewhere you can't see.
The words flowing in the sweetest melody.
She is but the goddess of poetry.
She sneaks into your dreams in the darkest night,
In the form of nothing but pure light.
She takes you by the hand to show you how
To see what others can't in the world around.
She shows you life and she shows you love.
You know she must be from somewhere above.
She is both your talent and your muse;
She is all the words you want to choose.
She's the rushing river through the snow,
The warm wind in the prairie's blow.
She's the cloud that passes through the sky.
She is the truth hiding in the lie.
She is water and she is wine.
She's an oxymoron by design.
She is peace and she is war.
She is from wealth yet she is poor.
She is hope and forgotten dream.
Though she still remains unseen;
She is there hiding up in that tree.
She is the goddess of poetry.
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Excellent.I love any and all poetry about Gods and Goddess'.Excellent writing form.
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This is a sweet poem about le Goddess of Poetry. It's very riddle-like, and I rather enjoyed it.
Your rhyming helped with the cadence of the poem. Go through and read it aloud to make sure you're keeping with the oral tradition, mystic rhythm that I feel this piece should have.
In the first stanza, I don't want you to say anything about poetry. I want that to be a revelation in the last stanza. That will help keep the punchiness of the poem flowing, and it will help get your readers invested
I really liked this stanza:
She is water and she is wine.
She's an oxymoron by design.
She is peace and she is war.
She is from wealth yet she is poor.
Even though this sort of poem has been done before, I really enjoyed your version!! Can't wait to see the edits!
I definitely love the concept of writing abotu the goddess of poetry. That's fun - a really great prompt. I like how you've tackled it as well. For the most part. I love the truth hiding in the lie and the oxymoron by design - both struck me as unique and lovely lines. But I think that your rhyme scheme here is limiting you, and causing your poetry to be perhaps not as lovely as it could. Consider the 'tree/poetry' rhyme. In addition to being feminine, the tree line is a bit simple and roughshod in comparison to your other elegant descriptions. I think that losing the rhyme scheme would really help the work - but overall, I love the concept you have going.
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