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Migraine

A blaring horn,
Like startling sun,

Screaming into,
Bloodied ears.

Nothing feels right,
Nothing makes sense.

All is compiled,
And then destroyed,

As the ticking of the clock,
Becomes a snare too loud.

The screwdriver turning,
Grinding into the soft tissue,

Already butchered by a crowd,
That whispers alone.

But the butterfly's screams,
And the nails against the board,

Keep you kneeling;
Keep you trapped.

Your mind's eye,
Left shaking on the ground,

As you succumb,
To the migraine headache.
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Alright, so I have a migraine today. This poem is really my sad attempt at trying to explain the pain. It is dissonant and disconnected because to a point, really that is what a migraine headache is. This poem is very abstract and is really just mess though, with a little luck, maybe a hot mess. Anywaythis is my first actual attempt at an abstract piece (most of my poems have been somewhat abstract accidentally, never to this extent) . What do yo guys think? I'd love some honest feedback.
Hope y'all enjoy!
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I had a clear feeling of loud fiasco chopped with bits of silence, like some movies have when showing a procession of events in something like a huge car accident. You only do get perceptions in snippets when you're in that much pain, at least that's how it is when I get them. This had all the glaringly bright, screeching abruptness that life can feel like with a migraine. Your explanation of the pain is quite accurate. Nice work!
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=robostorm Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
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~DeeryDeerth Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Already butchered by a crowd,
That whispers alone.

But the butterfly's screams,
And the nails against the board,


There's something so mysterious and catchy about these ones. Amazing job!
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=robostorm Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. That was what I thought too, so thanks. My personal favourite is the latter. Thank you for the :+fav: !
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~DeeryDeerth Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very welcome. :)
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~nowayXX Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you did a great job of explaining a personal experience we all endure :nod: its a great poem :heart:
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=robostorm Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thx! I'm so happy you liked it!
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~nowayXX Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well you made it easy to like :D :heart:
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*Albinowolftwin Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know the exact feeling...chronic migraines run in my family, and on average, I feel like I've been run over by a bus, kicked in the head by a horse, and drained of all my energy by the pain, vertigo, and nausea. I hope that you feel better!
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=robostorm Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
aww, thx so much!! Aren't migraines the worst?
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