Silence overtakes the land
In the wake of the end
When not one sound is heard
You know it was a success
Soon the wailing begins
From somewhere far away
As the smoke begins to fade
Nothing there remains
It was too loud to be heard
Too bright to be seen
Too fast to be found
Destruction is the only evidence
The explosion was instant
The devestation immence
The bomb was catastrophic
If one bomb worked that well
Then the second will undoubtedly be unconscionable
but will be fired anyway
as is the American way
And as the silence overtakes the land
In the wake of the second end
When not one sound is heard
You know it was a success
This great tragedy
Will always be taught
As such a great success
A sucessful massacre
Of thousands of people
And so begins this new age
Of fear, pain, wars and weapons
And so begins the atomic era
Whether the bombing is taught as a success - it depends where. On my history lessons in Poland, we didn't consider them as a decisive factor in Japan's surrender, but as a demonstration for the USSR. But it's still just as poor a justification.
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Here, we outright ask "what's the point of these bombs if we're not going to use them?!" and wind up actually treating the subject matter of what you say in your poem as something of an afterthought.
As a poem, it was thoughtful... its worth thinking about...
Thanks for the totally awesome
speaking of opinion, do read my latest journal entry, you won't be disappointed.
Also, yes, I saw the latest journal entry and I must say that I loved the Casa Blanca Reference! It was such a cool idea to go through and recognize all of those people (including myself... by the way I'm a chick
Wow you really watch a tonne of people! Rad entry!
A comment is basically "If I don't write down what's in my mind, I won't remember what this work was about in the first place". its the equivalent of a thought paper.
... Your a chick? then why use a name as manly as =robostorm? (and I'm being frank here - I look at that username, then I read your works, and then I just go... "Holy jack-in-the-beanstalk this has to be one helluva dude"... for starters you write like a dude, your ideas are like one, and you talk like a dude.)
I watch people who watch me... and a few who've earned my 'artistic eye' if you will. As for the rest... if it wasn't for them... I don't know where I'd have been... honestly I don't know.
Why aren't there sweethearts like you here in Pakistan... why... I mean... *sigh* you get what I mean, right?