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Silence overtakes the land
In the wake of the end
When not one sound is heard
You know it was a success

Soon the wailing begins
From somewhere far away
As the smoke begins to fade
Nothing there remains

It was too loud to be heard
Too bright to be seen
Too fast to be found
Destruction is the only evidence

The explosion was instant
The devestation immence
The bomb was catastrophic
If one bomb worked that well

Then the second will undoubtedly be unconscionable
but will be fired anyway
as is the American way


And as the silence overtakes the land
In the wake of the second end
When not one sound is heard
You know it was a success

This great tragedy
Will always be taught
As such a great success

A sucessful massacre
Of thousands of people
And so begins this new age
Of fear, pain, wars and weapons

And so begins the atomic era
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We always get taught about how the victory over Japan in the end of World War Two was won because of the two atomic bombs that caused the people to force a surrender from the government but one question I have always asked myself is 'why bomb Nagasaki after so much damage was already done in Hiroshima?'; I mean wasn't there enough bloodshed already?

By the way, technically speaking the atomic era began after the detonation of Trinity in New Mexico but the test detonation is not the main thing associated with the Atomic Era, instead it is defined by the bombing in Japan and the Chernobyl incident.
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I like the repetition, similarity in there being two bombs, and how the description of one flows into that of the other. This part is brilliant.
Whether the bombing is taught as a success - it depends where. On my history lessons in Poland, we didn't consider them as a decisive factor in Japan's surrender, but as a demonstration for the USSR. But it's still just as poor a justification.
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~robostorm Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
We learned it as being both but more so the deciding factor. I'm so glad you liked it, I was afraid that the repetition wouldn't quite work or that it would lose impact (no pun intended) the second time around, so thanks, I'm glad!
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~Roos-Skywalker Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope the next breakthrough in technology will be used for healing purposes. :-(
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~robostorm Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
possibly but you know that it will be changed into some sort of bio weapon. People find/make technology with the greater good in mind just to have to flipped into a weapon. It's the human way.
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~Roos-Skywalker Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The dark side of the human.
Join us, we have cookies. Hurr
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*shehrozeameen Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
... it is a reality I've forsaken... a sad reality that's crumbling the foundations of the country I reside in...

Here, we outright ask "what's the point of these bombs if we're not going to use them?!" and wind up actually treating the subject matter of what you say in your poem as something of an afterthought.

As a poem, it was thoughtful... its worth thinking about...
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Mood: Thanks ~robostorm Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I totally understand. Here in Canada (as far as I know) we do not have nuclear warheads, and we try to persuade other countries to dispose of their weapons as well. I'm glad you found it thought-provoking, that was my goal.

Thanks for the totally awesome :+fav:!
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*shehrozeameen Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) the comment has more value in my opinion.

speaking of opinion, do read my latest journal entry, you won't be disappointed.
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Mood: Zest ~robostorm Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
More value, how so?

Also, yes, I saw the latest journal entry and I must say that I loved the Casa Blanca Reference! It was such a cool idea to go through and recognize all of those people (including myself... by the way I'm a chick :blushes:, not a dude...I'm not that sure why everyone on here assumes the latter :( )

Wow you really watch a tonne of people! Rad entry!
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*shehrozeameen Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A fav basically means "okay, I'll put this in my collection, and look into it later" - its like a bookmark, or a reference.
A comment is basically "If I don't write down what's in my mind, I won't remember what this work was about in the first place". its the equivalent of a thought paper.

... Your a chick? then why use a name as manly as =robostorm? (and I'm being frank here - I look at that username, then I read your works, and then I just go... "Holy jack-in-the-beanstalk this has to be one helluva dude"... for starters you write like a dude, your ideas are like one, and you talk like a dude.)

I watch people who watch me... and a few who've earned my 'artistic eye' if you will. As for the rest... if it wasn't for them... I don't know where I'd have been... honestly I don't know.

:) If you watch classic movies, then honestly, I won't hesitate in saying this - you're awesome, dude. :)

Why aren't there sweethearts like you here in Pakistan... why... I mean... *sigh* you get what I mean, right?
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