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I've been driving down this road too long,
Trying to find my way.
I never wanted to be this far gone.
But you have nothing to say.

I've travelled all around the world,
Just trying to get home.
I've been everywhere I never wanted to go,
Where I'll never find you.

I've sent you postcards from every city,
Trying to show you that I still care,
But they were all returned to sender.
I guess that you weren't there.

I don't know what else I expected,
I'm always behind the wheel.
We knew it would be tricky,
But I guess I was hoping still.

You finally sent me a letter,
Saying you couldn't wait,
You had always deserved better,
And you needed someone who could hold you at night.

You couldn't have known then,
But I was tired of waiting too,
I had my truck in gear,
And was finally coming home.

I had decided I would drive it,
All through the night.
I wouldn't stop,
Until I held you in my arms real tight.

So I gunned it down the I-90,
From Butte to Madison.
I can't stop you from leaving,
But I might be able to convince you to stay.

I've been driving down this road too long,
Trying to find my way.
I'm finally home, standing on the lawn,
But you have nothing to say.
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The story of the trucker. Note the reference to the Frost poem. Hope y'all enjoy.
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For the form - I didn't like that you chose a free approach to rhythm. I just couldn't fit the lines comfortably, especially with this rhyming scheme.

And what you described - I don't think I find regret where I should. It isn't in the choice, is it? It's in something that happened before the poem, isn't it? At least that's what I feel; if I made this choice, I'd have no regrets. Provided that I understood the poem.
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*shehrozeameen Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The only Frost reference I have right now is "And Miles to go before I sleep"... apart from that, its a sweet poem...

reminds me of easy rider for some reason... or some sixties b-movie... I don't know... its good.
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~robostorm Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I had two! The first reference to which I was referring was in the title itself as it is reminiscent of the poem The Road Not Taken which is (to me) about regret. The second is what you found which again reinforces the first reference. I guess what I was getting at was no matter which road you choose to take you will always regret what you didn't do... a lame references I know.
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*shehrozeameen Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
its actually a well used reference in your poem, my friend :)

And I really like your poem... however, I've read one before this which you definitely must read. Honestly...

Its in Poetry-watchers... Its called "The Crossroads" by ~DannyMechanist. Its a lovely poem - brief, and very concise in its imagery.
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~robostorm Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I checked it out. It was very well done.
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*shehrozeameen Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) good to know.
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